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Those whom are flawed are said to plague the Earth,
Their painted face one would not learn to trust,
Yet, hope is not lost, if one proves their worth,
And flattered, loved, eyes will conceal the lust.
A passion flirts as family to the light
While Cupid fires an arrow in the breast,
Their heart can’t feel what’s exceeding its sight,
Too warm now to withstand the final test.

A flower will not rise in the growing chill,
A rose will wilt and leave no next of kin,
The leaves will fall and change against their will,
Knowing a summer day lies not within:
    For trees may choose which seasons they shall bloom;
    Tears will fall softly like snow-drops in June.
©2009 *baby-h
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This was one of my assignments for Literature this year. We had to write an essay on Shakespeare's Sonnets, which I chose not to do!
The other option was to write a sonnet based on Shakespeare's Sonnet 94 using the same metre, rhythm, syllables etc. And this was the result!

If you want a full explanation of what is going on I can email it to you (trust me, that's the essay-ish bit, it's not that interesting!) but this is basically about an affair.

It imitates the 4 seasons, starting with winter (the recognition of the affair), spring (redemption), summer (the romance is rekindled), autumn (suspicion once again arises) and then winter again. In that there are also references to the "human world" in the octave (first 8 lines) and the "vegetable kingdom" (I did not name it, some scholar did!) in the sestet (closing 6 lines).

Anyway I'd love your critique on this. I got 72%, which I was quite pleased with seeing as the last Literature essay I did I only got 62%!

Oh and bare in mind I'm Australian, so it does snow in June lol!

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lovely poem. didja write this around the same time u did that autumn pic w/the 4 photos?
and didja get ur marks for all ur subjects, or just the coursework and not for the exams?

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I went to church incognito, When everybody rose,
The reverend Smithy, he recognised me, and punched me in the nose
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no i don't think so, it was an assignment so it was more of a night time thing haha.
no i didn't get exam marks but i got everything else and it was pretty cool :)
how'd you go?

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~ love is a chemical reaction that causes delusions ~
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yeah, i always do assignments and stuff l8 @ nite. when its early theres too much to do=D
well i passed everything(whew!), and i got 2 passes, a credit, and a distintion. but i only just paseed 2 subjects^^;(56%)
but i got a D for programming, which is good, cos that's what the rest of my course should be based on.
:whisper:and i got a T(for Troll) for potions=P

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I went to church incognito, When everybody rose,
The reverend Smithy, he recognised me, and punched me in the nose
:iconbaby-h:
oh well done in programming.

haha i got exceeds expectations because it exceeded expectations that i went =P

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~ love is a chemical reaction that causes delusions ~

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